Tuesday, 9 August 2011

This moment

tight
hold me
like there is
no     tomorrow
breathe the moment sigh
  kiss  each   freckle   blushing   
slow dance under moonlit night
sing,  laugh even  for  no  reason
stir this  moment not,  it's all we have





     hold  each  drop of  us,  here  lingering       
capture whispered  breath i sigh as
you kiss  each blushing  freckle
   bliss comes like butterfly    
fleeing languid wings 
hold  me  tight  as
we slow dance  
moonlit   
night  





“Smile, breath and go slowly.” - Thich Naht Hanh, Vietnamese Zen Buddhist monk

Author's note:  This post follows the nonet form (9 lines; 9 syllables on the first line, 8 syllables on the second line.. until the last line is 1 syllable).    The first part is the reverse nonet form.  
This post is for the D'Verse Poets Pub, OpenLinkNight, hosted by Joe Hesch.   Doors open 3pm (every Tuesday) EST.   Bring your poem (any form) and share warm company.  

58 comments:

  1. Interesting. Fun. Creative.

    "stir this moment not, it's all we have"

    Perfect words that go well with the image.

    -H

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  2. kiss each freckle, blushing......what divine words :)

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  3. You do the nonet so well! I love the image of kissing each freckle! Beautiful!

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  4. wonderful capture of a moment we all seek.

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  5. This may just be the coolest thing I have seen from you! Love it.

    and feel free to use any picture you like :)

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  6. nice...love the form...and of course the sensualness in the words...kissing freckles is a fav passtime of mine...

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  7. "slow dance under a moonlit night"...doesn't get any more romantic than that.
    Love "kiss each blushing freckle".

    Simply beautiful.

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  8. Oh! I think this is one of my favorites! ;-)

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  9. This is beautiful:)
    YOu captured it perfectly

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  10. hm - dancing in a moonlit night and bliss coming like butterflies with tender wings...nice use of the form heaven

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  11. stir this moment not, it's all we have...

    The ultimate truth in one line. Some may marvel, but we know that's what's called poetry.

    (And I like your "feelthy peectures")

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  12. Loved the sensuality in this...very nice use of the form!

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  13. Early I read the story of evil ( http://poeticdelusions.com/2011/08/09/chimera/ )
    and now I read the story of love... Oh how wonderful.

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  14. Kissing each blushing freckle? WOW! Mesmerizing!

    Ms Heaven, you make serious poetry from happy, lustful scenarios. And I LOVE it! (Well, I really like it!!!)

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  15. Very, very sensual. A lovely well written piece and, a lovely read.

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  16. lovely nonet, one of my favorite forms. Touching write ~ Rose

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  17. Clever and beautiful. :-)

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  18. Interesting metric

    hmmmmm... that slow dance moonlit night seriously invites.
    Sweetly sensual=lovely.

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  19. This is simply gorgeous. I am so impressed with your use of this form; you make it look effortless.

    Just wondering . . . fleeting languid wings?

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  20. ..ah, this is an intimate one my friend… i like how it goes in different ways in a same form… you’re a true talented writer!(:

    Brightest blessings!

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  21. Thank you for your wonderful comments.

    Mama Zen: its fleeing, like flying :-)

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  22. This felt so honest and from the heart. fine form too
    nice write heaven ;-}

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  23. Very nicely and naturally done within the formal constraint. The reader doesn't imagine the message being rendered any other way.

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  24. speaking as a lady who's sadly celibate these days, you made my heart flutter :)

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  25. "bliss comes like butterfly
    fleeing languid wings "

    Wonderful picture with the lines above.

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  26. Butterfly wings and freckles blushing, made me grin.

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  27. I love this double nonet, Heaven. Quite a sensual moment caught here in your writing. Well done.

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  28. I love the sensuality of this...the words are beautiful, as well as the way you have formatted the text and the photo...very nice : ))

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  29. creative and fantastically done.
    a triangle n then a inverted triangle :)
    u r very talented girl.

    Loved it

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  30. Just love the expression of the nonets, the fragments of this singular moment of togetherness.

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  31. Wonderful form and movement in this picture of intimacy.

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  32. I loved this poem, Heaven.
    Beautifully done!

    Margie :)

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  33. Very nice, Heaven... a real feeling of intimacy here.

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  34. Yes, intimate is a nice way to put it, a lil steamy too, but invery good taste :) and very well written. Have been missing you. Glad I found you again.

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  35. Wow steamy, creative and and I love the shape you've created, this was a real treat.

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  36. I love what you've done with the nonet form here. Content and form convey sensuality and intimacy in a very tasteful and artistic way. Nicely done!

    David

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  37. Thank you everyone for your wonderful comments.

    I like trying out different forms of writing; more fun this way.

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  38. A great read.
    This looks like a really fun form - I must give it a go.
    Thanks.

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  39. Hi there Haven,
    sorry i'm only finding time to write now...
    It's so wonderful to read this, it lingers lightly and lands you softly in the "slow dance / moonlit / night".
    btw - i love "...capture whispered" (all in between) and "blushing freckle".
    Nice work with the structure.
    bliss to you and yours.
    Deb

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  40. Heaven, this is a very good piece. Really love it. I'm really into combining the visual aspects of poetry with the words themselves. Even the white spaces between the image and the poetry's triangular form shows connection to the moment. Really again, great job:)

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  41. This is beautiful, Heaven. I love everything about it. Well done :)

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  42. sensuous content wrapped up in a dazzling form! well done.

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  43. Seems we both had kissing on the mind this week..loverly poem..
    nice form as well..
    thank you for sharing:-)

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  44. Heaven, a lovely romantic dance of words and form....bkm

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  45. intensely romantic, love how the
    words clip onto my tongue when
    I whispered this poem.

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  46. I've never heard of this form before, but you did something very interesting...text and form.

    Liked this very much...a rush of passion!

    Lady Nyo

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  47. Form, content and image come together here to create a perfect whole.
    A very accomplished piece.

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  48. Beautiful piece, pic included... I love this form, too!

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  49. i sighed...

    "hold me / like there is / no tomorrow"
    "kiss each blushing freckle"

    yes...i definitely sighed a time or two.

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  50. Very well written and a beautifully laid out blog btw

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  51. Seams like we were on the same page... Lovely Nonet...

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  52. Nothing interesting to contribute, just wanted to say I really liked this piece :-)

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  53. Your words fit the form wonderfully...or should I say the form fits your words... ;) // Peter.

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  54. These are my favorite feelings in the world....wonderful and romantic. It makes me tick.

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