Monday 5 March 2012

What I want to do with you

morning paints your eyes grey 
but I smell the wild sea on your hair

the sad wind is blowing away
blue winterdrops on my arms but
i love you 
and my happiness craves the 
honeycomb in your lips

the rain drenches my skirt
tinged with red plums and berries

your words caress my neck,
i want to sink into your folds
like water on parched paper      

the sun nudges my limbs apart,
i want to embrace the scent
of your solitary soul, thrust of passion
in the changing shadow and light

moths and birds flee with our cries, 
leaves quiver to the bee stings 

I want to do with you 
what spring does to the cherry tree.*



"My words rained over you, stroking you.
A long time I have loved the sunned mother-of-pearl of your body.
I go so far as to think that you own the universe.
I will bring you happy flowers from the mountains, bluebells,
dark hazels, and rustic baskets of kisses.
I want to do with you what spring does with the cherry trees."

-Line and Inspiration from Pablo Neruda's Everyday you play

Posted for Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - OpenLinkNight - Monday  - Offering a spring poem as requested
and D'verse Poets Pub -  OpenLinkNight - every Tuesday at 3pm EST.    

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55 comments:

  1. next...you need to write a novel.

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    1. I do...okay ?!. Let me think about it..ha..ha...

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  2. nice....some delicious lines....the honeycomb of your lips....like water on parchment...leaves quivering to the bee stings....all layered well to build that feel...i like

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    1. I like those lines as well Brian.

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  3. What a beautiful spring poem.

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    1. Thank you. Neruda is a great inspiration.

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  4. wonderfully evocatively exquisitely sensuous and passionate.just wow!

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  5. I love that line by Neruda... imagine someone writing that for you!

    Your poem does justice to both the season and to the yearnings that arise with the sap.

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  6. I love the sensuous sensitivity of this poem, and the last line: Wow!

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  7. Bammmmm....holy cow, that was the essence of spring coming, covertly hot enough to put a twist in anyones knickers....I give you an 11 on the melty scale.

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  8. Neruda is one of my favorites, a wonderful line to draw inspiration from. And the sensuous images just flow one after another in this. This has to be the one that struck me most:

    i want to sink into your folds
    like water on parched paper

    Amazing job on this!

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  9. what gorgeous words that have
    created such gorgeous images in my mind.

    lovely. just.

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  10. This is so pretty, visual. I love cherry tree blossoms... I especially like:

    i want to sink into your folds
    like water on parched paper

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  11. Love this. I adore cherry blossoms. Loved that words got the same billing as wind, rain, sun...and especially love this line: "the sun nudges my limbs apart"...great assonance, great visual.

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  12. You got me with "I smell the wild sea on your hair" and had me hooked from there on. Just gorgeous.
    K

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  13. Absolutely beautiful...loved the first line.

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  14. Very beautiful.......loved every line.

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  15. Spring has truly sprung and can't say I'd mind having such things done to me. Although I may draw the line at bee stings..haha

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  16. Oh yes! I love you and Pablo! :)

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  17. Enchanting and beautiful~
    I loved how you guided us with amazing imaginary!
    Just wonderful...

    YOU WON my GIVEAWAY!!!
    Congrats, email me your address so I can send you your photo :D

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  18. Beautiful, Heaven.."I want to do with you
    what spring does to the cherry tree" ~ Happy sigh... :)

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  19. smiles...yes..what spring does to the cherry trees... spring in the air...and love...smiles

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  20. I felt like I was in heaven, letting spring suck from me those blossoms, which during winter's hibernation, I had forgotten were hidden there.
    A Neat write!

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  21. Fabulous write Grace. Sensual, sexy. Some lovely, lovely lines.

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  22. Sensuous and alive! Absolutely wonderful.

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  23. Oh yes. Love the image of sinking into your folds like water on parched paper. You make that final line bloom!

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  24. What nice this! I love Pablo Neruda so much:)

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  25. The beauty and desire of spring molded into human response.

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  26. Beautiful--and filled with a subtle eroticism that I love!

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  27. I always wanted to be a cherry tree. This is a fantastic piece that should stir all readers to passion.

    Cheers,

    Mark Butkus

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  28. My favorite line is: moths and birds flee with our cries,
    leaves quiver to the bee stings

    The hottest thing I ever said to my husband was: Anyone can do me. I can do myself. The question is, can you undo me.

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  29. My goodness, you do capture the passion and sensuality of the Neruda line. You have so many lovely lines that I hate to just quote one. This combination of the universal happiness with the concrete honeycomb is very compelling:

    and my happiness craves the 
    honeycomb in your lips

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  30. Well, most of what I wanted to say, has already been said by others here. Wonderful. I wish one day I can evoke the same images and emotions with my words :).

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  31. some incredible imagery here. winterdrops, honeycomb in your lips, tinged with red plums and berries, like water on parched paper- love that line, as you get the additional proximity parched has with parchment- very nice.moths and birds flee with our cries,
    leaves quiver to the bee stings really great lines from start to end, fun read. I enjoyed the piece a lot Thanks,

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  32. i agree ~ spring fever is heating up your poetry, Heaven!

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  33. The lines have such a natural, inevitable flow...sensual and compelling. This poem leaves the reader wanting more of it. Every stanza has an excellent phrase or picture ("I want to sink into your folds like water on parched paper") Very nice work.

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  34. Ah, Heaven, your sensual verse jumpstarts Spring for me. Even in January. :) xo

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  35. Gently erotic with the power to tenderly entrap. Beautiful work!

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  36. Beautiful! Pablo Neruda's work inspired me to write poetry. Here's my story: http://bareyournakedtruth.wordpress.com/about-nicole-luongo/

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  37. beautiful and vivid imagery Heaven. really enjoyed this.

    my favorite lines--

    the sun nudges my limbs apart,
    i want to embrace the scent
    of your solitary soul, thrust of passion
    in the changing shadow and light


    easy to identify with these well-penned lines. nicely done. -- C.

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  38. i want to sink into your folds
    like water on parched paper

    I'm sure Caddoc could take any amount of that...

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  39. How beautifully you expanded that spring/cherry tree relationship. Yum yum all the way down. Thank you for your visit and kind words on my recent post. I'll be back.

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  40. the second half gushed. here's my favorite nuggets: i want to sink into your folds... the sun nudges my limbs apart... i want to embrace the scent of your solitary soul... moths and birds flee with our cries.
    reading this was like stepping on pretty rocks across a spring river.

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  41. You had me after two lines
    then you really drew me in in the second verse,
    the rest left me dripping in wow,
    what I really like is that there's this sense
    that *nothing* is happening except in a person's head
    as this person looks on at another
    dreaming of love;
    of course, the images are palpable.

    Exceptionally beautiful poetry.

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  42. For anyone wanting to feel love and passion, especially in those first knowing moments- this is it. Just beautifully written- so sensual- and I think that the references to nature make it so earthy- so linked to everything that surrounds us. Fantastic

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  43. Spring brings everything to life, doesn't it? This is my favorite line: "the sun nudges my limbs apart"

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  44. Heaven -- you gotta put these all in a book, they're SUCH GREAT POEMS!! I really mean it, your stuff should be published in a tome I can sit with in a big cozy chair. Or on a picnic blanket under a cherry blooming wonderment tree!

    I like the part about the water on paper. I think fine parchment by candle light. And maybe some whiskey beside the water. :)

    xo

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  45. I love this! I'm trying to figure out how to share this with my wife without blowing my alter ego :-)

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  46. Beautiful and sensual! I truly enjoyed :)

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